I read your latest addition some time ago. I believe Jesus Christ is within us always even when we go astray or when we are being foolish in sowing to the flesh so that when we realize our error, we can call on Him at throne of grace to forgive us from our sins and help us not to do them again. I know He pulled me back from going into more darkness and so I am grateful to my Friend for always being with me in pulling me out of my "vomit" as I trust Him to keep me from returning like a dog to my vomit.
This is why we are not to grieve the Holy Spirit in us because He is not going anywhere; Ephesians 4:30
Anyway... as this is about a revival with a goal you have in mind, maybe the message can strike home about the unknown fate of the lost when Hope finds out from somebody that her friend was so happy that day when she had died because she wanted to tell Hope she believes in Jesus Christ. She was last seen skipping and dancing around the pool, even though she was disappointed that Hope had to cancel because she was not feeling well that fateful day. Maybe it will come from her friend's mother or sister or brother or maybe another friend of her or a neighborhood friend of hers. Not sure where Hope had moved from like how far away and all that, but just a suggestion that may help towards your goal in ending the story.
Just a suggestion... kind of like an added message that nobody can know the fate of the lost, but that should not be a reason not to come to Jesus because that person may very well be in Heaven. To think how many out there refuse to believe in Him just because they do not know the final fate of a lost loved one.
Since college is starting soon, you can feel free to end the story to your liking when it is convenient and fun for you to do. Thanks for having it.
